This is my add on craigslist for my detailing... what do you guys think? anything that could be improved upon? any sugestions/feed back welcomed

http://minneapolis.craigslist.org/da...386939255.html

 

Is Oklahoma to far?

Looks like a good ad man. Hope you get plenty of biz.

 

not for the right price.
can i get some help from a mod chang thing to think in the title

 

Fixed the typos in your title...

There are also a few typos in your craigslist ad. You might want to fix those too.

 

If I didn't have such terrible lookin paint when it's clean (it looks better dirty cuz it covers up all the scratches lol), didn't have a dented up door or rust, and I didn't like to do everything myself, I'd drive up there and have ya do my car.

 

Yea I saw a few typos in the ad itself...just read it over.

Also, Just a suggestion. You should start with the lower packages, and work up to the larger packages...this does two things:

A)When the person reads Plat. Pkg. They don't have to scroll down to see what is included in the gold, because they already read it in the above package...make sense?

B)The first price people see is the cheapest price, therefore they are more drawn in to looking at your ad...

Yea, I am a marketing major, so we are taught all these nasty ways of getting more people to spend their money!

Seriously, I would have you do my Monte if you lived closer! Good Luck man!

 

thanks mike for doin that for me... i guess the next time i get a comp i'll have to run it throught a spell check

 

Thanks for the advice micheal... i appreciate it

 

that kinda has the look of the ad i sent you to check on the pricing for me when i wanted to get my car detailed? but, yes do the corrections and then it will be perfect!! also, if you ever plan on traveling you can do my car??? see ya, hope you are able to make some much needed cash. good luck

 

Wish you were closer I would pay 200 for the platinum package